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Alright, as you should all know by now, I'm working on this novel. In some ways the progress is slow, because I have a bad habit of getting hung up on things.


Right now I am stuck on a transition. 

I was hoping that maybe a few of my reader types would look at it and throw ideas or suggestions at me. I would give you a link to my stash to read and you can give me input.

Good, bad, indifferent. it all helps.


The scene transition is basically, after a conversation, a scene set up I guess, my character sits around before going to bed.   She wakes up again and it's a bit of time later (not the next day, there's no reason to give a day by day at this transition).

My husband says it's confusing and he didn't see it as even a next day, he thought it was still part of the previous day, and even reading it again he doesn't see how I turn it into "a couple of weeks later".


I've read it and read it and read it, and I just can't fix it.    So maybe someone can throw a few things at me?

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Elizabeth
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When doing my Drunk Duckies do you prefer... 

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2 deviants said Simple background. Little pond, maybe a pool. Like my cabinet Duckies
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1 deviant said Other... (I'll tell you what I think)
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No deviants said No background, just the duckie please!
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No deviants said Overly complex background, Put that Ducker in a story! Give me context and details!

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